No worries, I might ask my girlfriend to re-write it for me! Thanks for the honesty though, too many people on moredirt.com kissed my arse when they responded to it.
EDIT: Is it all of it or can you list the sections which need re-writing?
Thanks.
Have someone review the entirity so that you have a consistent voice.
Have someone review the entirity so that you have a consistent voice.