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  • Do you know what? I was going to take offence at this, but you're completely right.

    In my defence the, reason it's that way round is that originally I was going to post an ironic, useless spot along the lines of "I spotted my friend Saj." and leave it at that.

    Ha fucking ha right? But then I got carried away with the pleasant memory of the encounter and added all the circumstances round it, making it both boring, pointless and yes, rather lacking in dramitic tension.

    I stand corrected.

    Not entirely lacking in dramitic [sic] tension, Dooks; what action there is, although denuded of its full potential for suspenceful impact, nonetheless captures the reader's attention with its vim and elan, while, as a convincing facsimile of contemporary street argot, it impresses, although in the final analysis it is perhaps most persuasive as an exposition of the life-affirming bonhomie sadly lacking in much of our social interaction today. All in all, an engaging, if not fully realised, vignette. A story fit for King's.

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