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• #3077
Cheers folks! Once again you come through. Reading back through it, it's a bit dense. I might have gone a bit off piste with it. Still, I'm keeping my hand in. I'll make alts as soon as I can.
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• #3078
It made my morning when I saw this thread light up again. Thank you Luci.
Hope alls well.
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• #3079
Dense? It's fucking great.
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• #3080
All's good. Moving house a week tomorrow, still kept the kids in the school catchment area. Anyone watching Child Genius? Well, that kid Thomas is in my daughter's class. If the school is good enough for him it's good enough for my spawn! I've got a fortnight of hard work now, lugging boxes and making the new place a home for the kids. It's all working out.
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• #3081
Cheers man!
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• #3082
Nice, I didn't find it dense...naked summer rain frolics are great...freeing, not into dogshit smearing myself though!
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• #3083
Huge drops, thrown, not fallen.
Great line.
I haven't read these for ages and spent yesterday and this morning catching up. Brilliant stuff as ever.
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• #3084
I know what you mean about it being a bit dense (re-reading it I think it's the description of the room). There are some beautiful scenes in there - the 4 lads and the whaft of splif, etc. but I guess you could maybe look for ones which aren't adding enough.
But the difficulty is the rambling coupled with the intense detail in a sort of film noir way is what makes the end/resolution so poignant and brings it all back into focus (for me at least). So I don't know if you'd want to take too much out.
The bulk of it sort of needs to be a be OTT and taking it's self too seriously for the dog-shit-on-chest scene to properly contrast.... and its that absurdity that really nails it on what it's like to be too in your own head and how you get out.
I'm not sure if that really makes much sense and it's a lay persons view.
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• #3085
I'm a lay person too!! But that all makes sense - yeah, I might do a spot of editing at some point. I'll read it again later with fresh eyes and decide. Cheers!
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• #3086
Stan is God AICMFP
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• #3087
New story soon Luci? You should know by now that your purpose within the LUFGUSS community is to satiate our needs for updates on soulless boss et al!
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• #3088
Lucy's away fucking about in Cornwall, beyond the pervasive tentacles of the interwebs so I doubt we'll get much from him.
Mind you, the sort of stories from that far reach, even the ones that might bleed north of the Tamar, are best not commited to the written word. There's some places even a naked, shitty moth immolator should tread with care and carry only the hushed whispers of the damned.
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• #3089
I light of Luci's absence can someone suggest something for me to read during my mid-afternoon friday comfort break?
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• #3090
Yeah, Friday's aren't the same without luci.....
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• #3091
How dare he escape his drudgery to enjoy quality time with his family when he should be sat writing stuff to amuse us!
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• #3092
How about a cheeky wank in the bogs at work as a tribute to Luci's roots?
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• #3093
I am refreshed, I am still on holiday, but I've been back at the keyboard.
Thanks for your patience, folks - hope it's worth the wait!I give you Captain Blood
Hope you like!
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• #3094
"Let me see you marching. Eye patch! Pirate hat! Swashbuckle cheer: Ah harrrr!"
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• #3095
Cook line and sinker.
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• #3096
I did post somewhere on here a picture of me in my swashbuckling era - I looked a proper knob. Happy days!
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• #3097
Another good one.
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• #3098
pity, pity, lols, twinge of sympathy, pity, lols, revulsion, pity, lols
I think I just won Reprographics Bingo
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• #3100
Fucking brilliant!! Best read whilst having a poo!!
Leaching.